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3-panel Brocure draft

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 03:32
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Attached is a 3-panel brochure draft that I worked up. I have to tweak some of the spacing, grammar, spelling and what not, but I figured I would post here to get some feedback.

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 04:15
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It looks good, Dennis. :)

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 11:03
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Thanks!

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 04:46
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Make it free-as-in-freedom please? :)

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 11:05
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Are talking about specific verbiage within the document or are you talking about the document in general?

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 12:30
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The document in general.

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 13:27
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That's the intent. :)

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 07:33
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And also make the "source" available? :)

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 11:05
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I'll post the .SLA when post the second draft.

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 08:35
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Hi Dennis,

I highly appreciate your work....!! You have got a talent (Technical documentation) with which you can contribute to the Trisquel project.

I have a few suggestions regarding the brochure.

Replace:-
[1] Gnome with GNOME.
[2] Trisquel GNULinux with Trisquel GNU/Linux.
[3] liberty and Free Software with libre/free software.
[4] Linux-based with GNU/Linux-based.
[5] Ubuntu kernel with Linux kernel.
Please remove the Ubuntu trademark from the Brochure. We don't want to promote ourselves on the wings of a proprietary trademark; Its uncalled ethically.

>> Make it free-as-in-freedom please?
Did you mean this, when you answered Dennis?

EDIT: And please distribute this brochure under a free license. You may use GNU GPL, GNU FDL or Creative Common's CC-BY / CC BY-SA licenses for that purpose.

Welcome to Trisquel community....!!

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 13:27
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Glad you like and thanks for the feedback (Ubuntu Kernel....ha I know better. I shouldn't stay up so late. :) ). I have made most of the updates already. I will apply the Creative Commons license and re-post the updated version along with the .sla file tonight.

If there are any other such projects going on, I am always willing to help.

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 11:25
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Try to use a light background for printing. This will also make the FSF logo more visible.

Also, you can try other fonts, you can find a lot of freely licensed fonts here and here.

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 13:28
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When I get this one out, I will probably make a couple variations of it. Thanks for the links, I am sure I will use them.

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 13:50
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I am a translator!

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good work!

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 13:57
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Thanks!

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 14:38
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It's beautiful! You should stick this in the documentation.

Is there space to add a big Trisquel logo to the top? Right now, the the reader will see the Ubuntu logo first. Could you add a brief libre license message at the bottom somewhere?

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 15:03
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Yes per lap4fsf I have removed the Ubuntu Logo and will add a Creative Commons License. I will re-post the updated version tonight.

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mer, 10/07/2015 - 18:35
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Be sure to choose a free culture Creative Commons license, like CC0 1.0, CC BY 3.0/4.0 or CC BY-SA 3.0/4.0. Bonus point: CC0 1.0 and CC BY 4.0 are compatible with the GPL.

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jeu, 10/08/2015 - 01:48
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As promised. Attached is the updated version with feedback included. Also attached is the .sla (source) file used to create the .pdf. The .sla is a Scribus file.

Feel free to post where ever you all see fit.

--Dennis

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jeu, 10/08/2015 - 05:47
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Great! Here's a few comments

- I notice that Arial is embedded (according to Okular), isn't that a problem?

- I guess we could change all the links from http to https, except the thinkpenguin one

- typos: accleration, GNULinux, idealogy, idealogy, effeciently, proctecting

- I wonder if this complies with https://www.gnome.org/logo-and-trademarks/

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jeu, 10/08/2015 - 14:29
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Corrected the typos. I will add the new GNOME logo when I get in tonight and repost.

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ven, 10/09/2015 - 00:25
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Updated

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